The Revised Composition
Composition 1.2
[Writing Lab] [The Original One]
A New Story of Titanic & Deep Rising

It was along the coast that a lot of people gathered together, surprised at what they saw. There was a huge, ugly and disgusting monster coming toward the coast, dragging a huge ship with it. Many journalists came to this coast, too, when they heard the news. Everyone seemed to want to get the first hand information. As the monster and the ship approached, the journalists tried to communicate with the monster. And it was at this moment that everyone on the coast saw a terrible and awful scene, a scene they would never forget forever. On the deck, there were a few people crying and yelling and all of them looked like they had just have been through a disaster. Besides, around the ship, everyone also saw blood and many pieces of human¡¦s corpses hanging everywhere. It was really like Hell. What was more, they glanced at the name of the ship. And it said ¡§Titanic,¡¨ the most incomparable, wonderful and greatest ship in the world. What could have happened to the greatest ship? Everybody was afraid, some screamed and started to run away.

Suddenly, the monster opened its mouth and said, ¡§ Don¡¦t go away! Don¡¦t be afraid. I won¡¦t hurt you. I have had enough. The purpose I come here is that I have some words to tell you, human beings, and I hope you can follow my instruction; otherwise, I can¡¦t promise if the same thing won¡¦t happen again.¡¨ Then one of the journalists asked, ¡§ Who are you? What are those words? What¡¦s going on here? What have you done?¡¨ The monster replied, ¡§ You ask me who I am? Look at me! I am the masterpiece of you. I am made up from your selfishness, greed, desire and coldness. Can you see the polluted sea? That¡¦s where I live!¡¨ When everyone looked at the monster again carefully, they found it was composed of the legs of an octopus, the jellyfish¡¦s body and the head of an anemone. ¡§ Do you want to know what happened? Let me tell you. It¡¦s a kind of blood revenge against you human beings.¡¨

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It was a peaceful evening on the sea. Some chatting and light awoke me and I decided to check it out. As I drew close to the sea level, I found a large ship with brilliant light. The sky was so clear and a lot of stars were twinkling. When the sea wind blew at people¡¦s faces, they almost could smell the sweetness in it. This night was the maiden voyage of Titanic. Everything was merely fine and great. Everyone on the ship was drinking, eating, talking, laughing and enjoying the happy atmosphere.

Among the rooms that shed light and gave out laughter, I noticed a most magnificent hall. In the luxurious restaurant, a man called Jack sat together with a woman Rose, some man named Robert and their families and had dinner. Everybody seemed to be very happy and joyful.

At this moment, these stupid people still didn¡¦t notice that I had attached myself with the ship and was ready to begin my attack. From the windows, I looked at them and thought, ¡§How can they be so cheerful and enjoy themselves? Can¡¦t they perceive their folly and mistakes? Look at my features! I am not what I used to be. I hate mankind. Because of them, nobody in the water dares to speak with me. I don¡¦t want to give myself in to this. I will revenge. I will make them suffer from the same pain.¡¨ The more I thought, the more furious I became. Then, I stretched out my tentacles and assaulted it, the ship decorated with the luxury that disgusted me.

I was proud and excited to see the scene of the ship change. People threw out what they carried and cried out loudly. They ran everywhere just like birds frightened by a gunshot. They held each other, asked and begged me to let them go. But I didn¡¦t care. I wouldn¡¦t believe human¡¦s words anymore. I wound around them with my tentacles and swallowed everything. In my mouth, I could feel them dissolved little by little. Then, I spit their bones out. Frankly speaking, the taste was not bad. There were also some people who tried to escape by jumping into the sea. Unfortunately, they could not move faster than I could. How could they think they could compete with me? I caught them and tore them into pieces. Near the ship, the water turned red because of the blood. I was so content with all I had done. It was also at this moment that I witnessed your selfishness. In order to survive, some people took the aged, the children or women as their shields. Oh! How cruel you were!

But as I turned my head, I noticed two males and one female. I heard one of the men said to the woman.

¡§Listen to me, Rose! You can survive! Promise me! Don¡¦t give up! I will be your shield. I won¡¦t let the monster hurt you. Run, Rose! You can have your own future.¡¨

¡§No, Jack, how can I live without you?¡¨

¡§Oh! Rose, I love you. I also hope I can go with you; however, it¡¦s impossible. Promise me! You can go through it by yourself.¡¨

¡§Oh, Jack!¡¨

¡§That¡¦s enough, you, two guys!¡¨ the other man said.

¡§Since you love each other so deeply and want to be together, ok, I promise you. Both of you can have your wish fulfilled when you die. Now, you will be my shields,¡¨ the man sneered with a gun in his hand.

¡§Rose, this is the result of your choice!¡¨

Then, the man shot the woman. But suddenly, a shadow came and kept off the bullet.

¡§Oh, Jack! You, beast! How can you do this? How awful you are!¡¨

¡§Whatever you say, I don¡¦t care. He also has to die. So, that makes no difference. All right, it you turn again, Rose,¡¨ the man smiled sinisterly.

¡§Robert! You are really so inhuman!¡¨ the woman said.

¡§Oh, Rose¡K¡¨ the bulleted man said weakly.

And I saw the dying man trying to protect the woman from being shot and being devoured by me. He stood there in front of me, fearless. His eyes were fixed on the woman he cared so much. Blood kept pouring down from his wound, yet he did not move a bit. The woman, in return, embraced the man and tried to protect him from harm, too.

It was hard for me to believe that there were some people who still kept true love with them in their hearts and could consider for others. Little by little, I was touched by the two persons¡¦ sincerity. I thought there was still hope in the world or in men¡¦s hearts. As a result, I swallowed the man who threatened them. Seeing that I had devoured his opponent, the bulleted man said to me, ¡§You, monster, we don¡¦t understand exactly why you are angry. But since you can hear and understand our words, why don¡¦t you try to speak out? We and the people you devoured are innocent. You can¡¦t judge everyone with the same viewpoint. Please tell us, human beings, what you hope and please stop hurting the people on the ship.¡¨

Thus saying, the wounded man gulped and passed away. I couldn¡¦t believe what I saw next, the woman next to him grabbed the gun and shot herself, too, smiling with tears in her eyes. Feeling remorseful, I stopped my revenge.

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¡§That¡¦s why I am here now,¡¨ the monster said to the journalist. ¡§I may be a little excessive but it will be more useful, right? In the end, I strictly want all of you to know one thing. The sea doesn¡¦t belong to you, human beings, only. All of you always hope to live in a clean, comfortable and beautiful house, so do all of the marine organisms and myself.¡¨

After saying these words, the monster dived into the sea and disappeared quickly. The sea surface looked as calm as usual. Along the coast, people were left with very complicated feelings, anger, fear, confusion and shame, too.

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